I guess you've followed the review template here, but it does seem a bit odd to see the game split out by gameplay graphics etc. And it's quite refreshing actually!
However, my main issues with your review would be: it's very personal. You just explain how it affected you, but as someone who hasn't played the game, I have no sense of what it actually is, apart from a platformer. You need to elaborate on the premise of the game etc. The review reads like it is aimed at someone who has already played the game.
at times it seems to jump around but overall it is enjoyable. I loved it and would like to see a sequel.I do feel there were things that could have been explored further. Would like to see more of what happened afterward involving Ishtar. Would have liked more back story on her and the Freeman as well
we have no idea of the story, or who Ishtar and Freeman are, so this is pretty meaningless.