Ha ha, not bad Zippy! Not sure what 'learning disabled' means, but you sure have a great vocabulary.
It's pretty breathless (not a bad thing) and is an entertaining read. At the same time, it probably needs a bit more structure and focus to make it more accessible. It's quite fun though. Hopefully you're enjoying working on this project.
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if one listened between the pitter patter of the rain and the quite thunder in the distance you could hear the wrinkles forming on his brow
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..this made me smile
