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Originally Posted by coyls3
Good first draft, but there are a few things that need addressing.
1) The review is to long. For this site, reviews should be around 1000 words.
2) You keep going from first-person to second-person. Here, they prefer the writers to use first-person in their writing. Use words like "the player" and "I" instead of "you" and "we."
Fix those things and I'll be happy to give it another read for ya.
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Thanks for the comment! Just to be clear, since I'm new to this, what do you mean "give it another read"? Is there a way to resubmit this after editting? If so, is there a special way to do this, or do I just post it again?
Thanks!