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Old 05-27-2011, 11:57 PM   #4
coyls3
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Re: Please Rate This Review: L.A. Noire

Good first draft, but there are a few things that need addressing.

1) The review is to long. For this site, reviews should be around 1000 words.

2) You keep going from first-person to second-person. Here, they prefer the writers to use first-person in their writing. Use words like "the player" and "I" instead of "you" and "we."

Fix those things and I'll be happy to give it another read for ya.
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