Re: Please Rate This Review: L.A. Noire
Good first draft, but there are a few things that need addressing.
1) The review is to long. For this site, reviews should be around 1000 words.
2) You keep going from first-person to second-person. Here, they prefer the writers to use first-person in their writing. Use words like "the player" and "I" instead of "you" and "we."
Fix those things and I'll be happy to give it another read for ya.