Very nice first review!
I'd drop the case spoilers. I dont think theyre necessary.
Other than that the only criticism I'd offer would be to cut a paragraph/focus your criticism of the game environment.
I knew what you were getting at, having felt the same way about Red Dead Redemption.. a beautiful yet strangely uninteractive & uninteresting game world? I get that totally.
Anyway, I'll holler at the mods to check your review out! It's good stuff, I think.