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Old 04-07-2011, 02:32 PM   #22
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Re: Please rate this review: Call of Duty: Black Ops

Hey Li-ion, the concept of the review while clever, but it isn't original enough of a hook to really suck me into it. I also agree with Pedro that the sentence structure is a tad rough and needs to improve. The text just reads very dense and laborious. I would recommend you work one-on-one with an editor you trust to hone your writing style a bit more and try writing more reviews.
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