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Old 01-18-2011, 03:35 PM   #6
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Re: Please rate this review: Call of Duty: Black Ops

I hadn't read it, as there is really no likelihood of me playing this game

It is a little difficult to criticise your review, as I can't really put my finger on where it falls down. Don't get me wrong, it is well written, but for me it is a little heavy in tone - maybe the text is a little dense.

You could split the second paragraph into two paragraphs, one about walking the dog, and one about the clunky controls.

I would also say that you could put some more light-hearted stuff in there. You skip over the 'positive' aspects of the game very quickly and concentrate on the negative aspects. I know it's a 6/10, but I think you need to emphasise what the game does well to stop this being a one-note review. Maybe try and lighten the tone between the second and third paras.

Now, take this with a pinch of salt as I could be talking through my hat. Other opinions would be welcome.

Also, of course I should mention that the dog-walking conceit is a good one and it is pretty well written overall; you get your opinion across very well. Just needs some 'balance' to make it easier to read.
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