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Old 07-12-2010, 07:29 PM   #14
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Re: Please Rate this Article: Examining Choice in Dragon Age: Origins

Originally Posted by Zarmaka View Post
Good tip, Adem. I cut down on the intro condescension. I'm currently working on reducing the overall size of the article.
I realized I did not say what I liked about it in the first post, and I'm sorry for that. I didn't want to come off like I thought it was terrible throughout.

I thought your points were well hit and well explained. When I say cut by 20%, I mean that in order to open it up to be longer without being unnecessary filler. You could do much more with this article because it's a good premise for an opinion piece, and it's a subject worth discussion. This is especially true considering what we've heard about DA2 so far.
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