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Old 03-17-2010, 02:28 AM   #2
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Re: Please Rate this Review: RED FACTION: GUERILLA

Hey Brandon.

Good work, good work. Overall this one's a fun read, but it does need a little polish.

First off, it's pretty chunky. I'd say you can lop off about 400 words and it'd read a lot tighter.

Secondly, don't worry so much about going into details. stick with the humor and your commentary, and the game will likely explain itself through your remarks.

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