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Jason Karney · 06-02-2009, 08:18 AM

Hi,

That was a very well written review. I haven't played Fallout 3, but reading this piece, I really get a feel for the dark view of the retro-50's milieu that the game is based upon.

Excellent grammar and vocabulary. The only thing I noticed is "...as the protagonist grows in their powers," which should be "his" powers.

I think you map out flaws nicely as well. I probably wouldn't reference general critiques of the game; you could remove that without hurting anything.

I'd approve this for publishing to our home page, with the same caveats that Brad suggests: a touch of trimming, plus the addition of High/Low/WTF and consumer advice per our style guide (see any published review for example). If you're interested, please make these updates and we can post it.

Keep on writin'!

06-02-2009, 08:18 AM	#3
Jason Karney Pixel King Join Date: May 2002 Location: the land of confusion Posts: 2,417 Rep Power: 16	Re: Please Rate This Review: Fallout 3 Hi, That was a very well written review. I haven't played Fallout 3, but reading this piece, I really get a feel for the dark view of the retro-50's milieu that the game is based upon. Excellent grammar and vocabulary. The only thing I noticed is "...as the protagonist grows in their powers," which should be "his" powers. I think you map out flaws nicely as well. I probably wouldn't reference general critiques of the game; you could remove that without hurting anything. I'd approve this for publishing to our home page, with the same caveats that Brad suggests: a touch of trimming, plus the addition of High/Low/WTF and consumer advice per our style guide (see any published review for example). If you're interested, please make these updates and we can post it. Keep on writin'!