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Old 02-15-2009, 04:29 PM   #3
aoki
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Re: Can you just give me feedback on my review? Rainbow Six Vegas 2

"The overall presentation of Rainbow Six Vegas 2 is luscious, palatable, pleasing, sweet, satisfying, attractive, engaging, gratifying, or whatever word you would like to use."

"the weapons are standard"

Show, don't tell:

http://cubreporters.org/2008/10/writ...l-readers.html

Too many redundant words eg noticeable difference, generally obliterate, progressing for five years, flawless in all aspects, easier and oriented.

Read this:

http://www.orwell.ru/library/essays/...nglish/e_polit

And these:

http://www.economist.com/research/st...TOKEN=18275701

http://www.economist.com/research/st...TOKEN=18275701
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