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Old 01-30-2009, 06:22 PM   #4
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Re: Please rate this review: Mass Effect

Another good one from Izz.

The only thing i'd bring up is that your overall premise about the story/characters etc is so strong and flows so well, it's a shame when you get into the nuts and bolts of the mechanics. i'd say cut the two paragraphs that start with "Veteran RPGers" and "Moving and shooting" and just leave the rest as-is.

Otherwise, kudos. You're really turning out some great stuff.
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