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Old 11-14-2008, 05:47 AM   #9
Chi Kong Lui
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Re: Star Wars: The force Unleashed-Please rate this review

Brad, perhaps a general description of the game premise/story in between the first and second paragraphs would address your concerns? Otherwise, could you be more specific about what other criticism you might be looking for as a reader?

As for the tone, I agree with Bracken in a earlier post that the review has character and it doesn't feel over the top of anything like that.

I do have two additional edits. Please edit the use of the the second person (ie you) and take out this line in the final sentence:
"although I'm glad I rented it as opposed to buying it"

Perhaps taking out the second person would tone down the informalness as well.


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