Hey S.N.F.-
here are a couple of ways I could go on this, but I think the overall most pressing issue is that the piece, while interesting, is simply too long.
if you're interested in having this piece published, I'd say the best place to start is to distill the entire thing down to one solid page and make the points you feel most strongly about in a very concise fashion.
you've obviously been spending a lot of time thinking about game theory, but the truth of the Internet is that the vast majority of readers would abandon ship before finishing the first page... if you can trim it down, I'd like to see a revised version.
